You have also missed an indisputably fine edit where I put a translation to Penumpasan Pengkhianatan G30S/PKI. The "The film shows the G30S leadership as ruthless and planning "every move to the last detail", taking joy in using excessive violence and torturing the generals, depictions which have been read as portraying "the state's enemies as outside the realm of the human"." bit is too excessive and uses quotes that can be simplified to "inhumane". There's also some excess detail that I removed.
I don't remove them, I summarize them and merge them to the first paragraph. Can you use quotations in the edit regarding "Why excessive wording around the use of the film since Suharto fell?" so that I can understand further? 4. To put it beside "docudrama" means that it claims propaganda as a genre, which is certainly isn't. The film is not a propaganda, but rather misused as propaganda by the New Order. I won't use any harsh language, and I hope you will too. 2A00:23C7:2B86:9800:89A0:C5A6:BF92:D084 ( talk) 09:31, 8 July 2021 (UTC) You should've pinged me, given that I do not watchlist this article, but I hope we can reach an agreement. it's one of the reasons we have the WP:FAOWN policy, although why you don't seen to think you need to worry about it is something of a concern, as the edits here definitely needed to be discussed (and rejected) first. What is a "relatively high budget"? Why take "propaganda" out of the lead when it is one of the most important aspects of the article and needs to e in the first paragraph? Why excessive wording around the use of the film since Suharto fell? Why remove the very brief sentences that outline the film (a common aspect of well-written articles)? The edits represented a backward step. Per BRD, you made a bold edit which I reverted. Gerald Waldo Luis, please stop edit warring.
The article meets ll the GA criteria, so I am passing it.- Dwaipayan ( talk) 21:53, 27 January 2013 (UTC).Thanks for the review thus far! - Crisco 1492 ( talk) 15:56, 26 January 2013 (UTC).Regards.- Dwaipayan ( talk) 15:32, 26 January 2013 (UTC) Yes, now the alt texts read appropriate.- Dwaipayan ( talk) 15:32, 26 January 2013 (UTC).What do you think needs improvement? I have changed the alt text for the pictures and made them more or less like the example at WP:ALTTEXT (neither is used to describe the person in question, so describing them is not necessary) - Crisco 1492 ( talk) It's currently not even an FA requirement.However, this may not be a GA requirement.- Dwaipayan ( talk) 16:36, 25 January 2013 (UTC) Alternative text for the images definitely need improvement, please see WP:ALT.Haven't found anything more in RSes than what's in the article already. - Crisco 1492 ( talk) 15:56, 26 January 2013 (UTC) If I'm able to get ahold of a copy where the credits are actually legible (the one I have is in p***-poor shape) I can consider that.However, this is not necessary, and of course not a ga requirement.- Dwaipayan ( talk) 15:32, 26 January 2013 (UTC) They can refer back to cast section if needed, when encountering a particular actor/character's name in some other section. I was merely asking if you would consider such a section, since that often help in easy navigating for the readers. Yes, I agree that cast section is not mandatory.Not entirely necessary, per WP:FILMCAST point 3. - Crisco 1492 ( talk) 23:56, 25 January 2013 (UTC).Do you think a separate "Cast" section would be appropriate? that usually helps in easy navigation.- Dwaipayan ( talk) 16:31, 25 January 2013 (UTC).Typo, thanks for picking that up. - Crisco 1492 ( talk) 23:56, 25 January 2013 (UTC)."Director Monty Tiwa likewise praised the film's shorts." Is that the word (shorts) that you intended? I do not have the technical knowledge to understand if "shorts" mean something in filming parlance.- Dwaipayan ( talk) 16:15, 25 January 2013 (UTC)."The generals are kidnapped, and in several cases killed, in front of their families, while later the captured generals are tortured while the communists dance around a bonfire." This sentence does not sound well-structured, with two "while"s.The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review. This review is transcluded from Talk:Pengkhianatan G30S/PKI/GA1.
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